What we're going to change about 'The Pathway' opening two minutes

In our draft of 'The Pathway', we had to change specific things to make it better as certain points of the two minutes let us down. We will be taking out the scene of the last minute as it didn't require much effort and let our marks slip. We also had to change some of the shots as Emma's face didn't blend in and there wasn't much music in the background either. To replace the 'walking down The Pathway scene' we decided on a scene where it would be at a graveyard, this would achieve more marks because it is more than just one location and it can be seen that we put more of an effort in to not just stay at one place. After feedback from Miss Martin, we have decided to put the original beginning of our film half way through at the end, and take out the 'walking down The Pathway' scene and replace it with the scene at the graveyard and put that at the beginning to give the 2 minutes more meaning and more of a storyline. We will be also adding titles to the beginning of our 2 minutes, this is to give more evidence that it's the beginning of the film and introduces cast members.

This should boost all our marks that we have missed out on in our draft and also make the 2 minutes of film more interesting to watch. It was until after we viewed the draft that Bryony, Emma, James and I had realised what was missing and will be including it our published version of the film.